Broken Wings

born in Manhattan and worked with carpentry...

I enjoyed this very, very much. Great detail, wonderfully written, no typos or misspellings, and perfect grammar! I do hope you write more to this story. One thing, however, irritated ...

Thank you, Writersdomain :D I will get to work fixing what you have pointed out. I never really thought about things like that, mostly because no one has ever mentioned ...

Chapter One – I reached for the shelf, trying to pull the book out. Finally my fingers gripped the spine and I pulled it out only to have myself being ...

I think I posted this before, quite a while ago, but even if I did I'm posting it now. Please tell me what you think, and point out as many ...

Way, way too many typos. Don't be sloppy with your work; double check it, always! Especially if it is for school. The typos distract me from other grammar and actual ...

I really enjoyed this story, but I couldn't find a ...theme or moral of any kind. It was a nice little story, quite interesting, and very well written, but no ...

As a fearful blush darkens by ears; A venomous look that sends chills down my spine. His hair standing up on his back, deep brown; A venomous look that sends ...

Chapter Two – I stared at Sanji’s pants, the silence weighing down on me like a sack of flour. Sanji was staring at Lilli’s purple dress, who was in turn ...

Chapter One – “Valeria!” She was standing only a few feet away from me. I could see her black silky hair and I reached out to stroke it. But the ...

Wings is back! Finally picked up the courage to put this in here. So feel free to critique to a dying point. :wink: ~~~ Prologue- I crouched low to the ...

It almost...scares me. Like Sureal said, it reminds me of the Planet of Apes. What if they get too intelligent and overpower us? Of course, this will probably not happen ...

Haha, that dress was actually a mistake. Well, the design for it was. But...yeah, I like it too.

Good enough excuse for me. Ten words? Wait 'til you have to memorize half the dictionary for the SAT's. But still, it would mess me up, too. Eep .____. now ...

Chapter Two/Part One— For a moment it seemed like nothing moved, nothing breathed. Finally the dragon shifted its mass and swung its tail around, lowering it near me. I finally ...